Editoral Report 15b

            This blog post will examine a different aspect of the rough cut than before. Again, we will look at how both the content and form changed between the two.

Selection from rough cut

Roughcut

1.     Let’s first start out by examining the differences between the videos in terms of their content. The most major content change was the topic addressed. I found that my first draft didn’t really follow the requirements of the project, so I had to type up something completely different. I decided to talk about how I had to research every argument ever made. This level of research isn’t necessarily specific to a genre, but more specific to a topic (i.e. an argumentative prompt). I then talked about how the incorporation of the evidence varied from genre to genre. QRGs incorporated their evidence through hyperlinks. The change in content communicated the idea more effectively because it reduced the amount of repetition present. My first draft seemed to be a mere repeat of what I had said before. Another major content change can be found in the references. While I hadn’t yet incorporated these into the rough draft, they changed the content quite a bit. I referenced a few things about my writing process (its similarity to the Onion and a reference to my QRG). This allowed the audience to better understand what I was talking about, and thus were able to understand my writing process a bit more. These changes help the audience better understand what my writing process is like.

2.     There are also a few form changes. For one, the setting change was perhaps the most prevalent. I tried to explain how it was night by having a window in the background, but I don’t think that was very effective. My attempt at showing the final stage in my writing process wasn’t conveyed effectively. So, I decided to make this section to look more like an interview. I put on a suit in an attempt to show how my writing process has changed. I have become more serious about my writing (hence the suit). The change in attire/setting better shows how my writing process has evolved. This helps communicate the entire purpose of the project (to show the change in my writing process) more effectively.