This blog post will contain
information about a peer review I preformed for Jackson. It will include information
containing what he did well, and some things he needs to work on.
I
decided to peer review Jackson Starmer’s Content
Outline.
1. I chose to make an outline suggestion for
the peer review on Jackson’s outline. This included information describing his
level of development in respect to his outline.
2. I believe I improved Jackson’s work with
my feedback in a few ways. For one, I made suggestions about explaining the
topic itself in further detail. Most people may not know what a fast skin is,
so it would be beneficial to explain it. I also suggested including exact
sources in his outline. This will help both him and the reader understand
exactly what he is referencing. I also suggested incorporating more emotion
into his argument in order to persuade the audience more effectively.
3. I included information about the
rhetorical information on pages 40-41 from the Student’s Guide into my feedback. For instance, I talked about how
this topic provides to a broad range of audiences. People all across the
country have children who have swam before or currently swim. With that being
said, Jackson must make sure to explain his topic in relation to the audience. Because
if the audience doesn’t understand the topic, they are going to loose interest
very quickly.
4. One thing I could work on is the level of
detail in his outline. All throughout the outline, he kept referencing different
aspects if the event and continued on to explain them in a way that formed his
argument. Through Jackson, I can learn to better incorporate my evidence into
my argument.
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